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 Post subject: Through The Fire (Redemption)
PostPosted: 10/29/03 12:39:08 AM 
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http://www.soundclick.com/bands/6/deckaboyrecords.htm



Click the song name and prepare to nod your head...
If ya'll ain't feeling this I need more specific details on what I did wrong


Beat----Through The Wire-Kanye West

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PostPosted: 10/29/03 01:18:49 AM 
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I couldnt make head nor tail of what you was sayin.. The beat drowned
out the vocals too much.. :-?


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PostPosted: 10/29/03 01:31:45 AM 
listening right now...umm your way off beat for one..and you need to add some fucking balls to your voice damn bme you need work man a lot..and a better mic mabye cause your sound like Alf mixed with weird Al :afro:


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PostPosted: 10/29/03 01:44:12 AM 
i must admit having listened to it again the content is good man you just have to work on delivery a lot..


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Hmmmm, I feel this is a lot better than you're other shit. However, you still need to up your vocals and your charisma because, at the moment, you're like the Radiohead of emceeing. I really don't feel your voice at all. Lyrics (what I caught) sounded nice and your multis hit home very nicely indeed.
You paused a too many times for me which took my attention away from the track in places.

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PostPosted: 10/30/03 01:17:56 PM 
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damn. you could be my boy Kamali's twin.

i dont like these Just Blaze / Kangay West style beats... i dunno why. they annoy me.

hmmm. your flow is too simple and you lack in presence. the rhyme content isnt bad... but 50% is what you say... the other 50% is HOW you say it.

try upping your professionalism a bit more.

otherwise... not a bad attempt.

peep this and see if you catch my drift.

http://www.hiphop-elements.com/phpBB/vi ... hp?t=44732

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PostPosted: 10/30/03 08:17:46 PM 
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ICONOCLAST wrote:
i dont like these Just Blaze / Kangay West style beats... i dunno why. they annoy me.


^word

but yea wake tha fuck up when you recording cuz i can honestly say nobody wants to listen to dis shit when you sound like that...i mean, listen to this yourself wit your eyes closed and picture you droppin this in front of a crowd or some shit...naw homez...

you got offbeat at a few spots...flow got predictable til you switched it up near tha end...delivery was non-existent...you'll get more into it tha more you record tho...keep up..

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Word up, The important thing is to keep dropping!!

I'll peep this shit soon.

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the beat is just horrible..but whatever....i can hear all of what your saying but it sounds like your just saying your rhymes instead of rapping them..it was really boring the beat and you didnt go together..anyway stay up and keep trying and work on your flow and mic presents.


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PostPosted: 11/01/03 04:30:52 AM 
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I'm listening to this as I post..

Not really feeling the beat.. lol, Sounded like something the Chipmunks may have dropped... I dunno it was cute, but it got annoying.. fast.. This effect is played..

Man, this is way better.. Your levels are a little better, you're still asleep and without a sense of rythm... You need to own beats and HAVE a flow... I need to be able to hear what you're saying to give you critique on the lyrical content... I think you need to find some better beats.. You seem to have a hard type voice so maybe some dark shit would suit you better, as opposed to this fucking chipmunk-sing-a-long bullshit... Haha...

I suppose you're lyrics are what give you a chance.. Delivery remains to be seen... I've noticed improvement in your last track to this one, In that you started stronger, But it's still a lifeless performance... You lack meaning or feeling.. It's hollow. You don't want to battle me yet, trust me...

I think you're certainly getting there, you're very lucky to have this group of people giving you props, And if you don't improve off of what they are saying.. Then you'll never improve, full-stop...

Like One Term sort of said - When you play this back does it sound OK? Or can you spot your own flaws.. I guess as you improve you're gonna look back at this and cringe.. lol

Props for your persistence and slight elevation... Keep at it.. I want you to kill beats!!

Pz' :afro:

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Word to Fu about the beat. I half expected to hear 'Alvin, Simon, Theodore!' cut in on the instrumental haha. I can hear you a bit better then your last ones you dropped. Your delivery was non-existant, I know I'm hardly one to talk, but still. You got off beat in quite a few places too, and had very little prescence if any. I agree with Fu, I reckon you would suit some darker shit a bit better. You had some good lyrics, though. Definitely a strong point.

Peace. Keep dropping.

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BME!!!!



i don't like this beat...it doesn't seem to match ur lyrics...you were off beat, and u definitely gotta work on delivery..it sounds like u were just...saying it...keep workin on it man...just keep workin...

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i can't believe none of u have heard that beat before, that songs got a fuckin video and everythin. I loved that song by kanye west, but to be perfectly honest it kinda made me think of u differently. I considered you to be one of the kings of this shit, u kinda had a legacy goin on, but after hearin this it kinda takes away from dat. It was just weird how u ran the shit so well in text, but couldn't follow through on the mic. Anyway this is my crit, and i'm sure someone as determined as urself will someday master the mic the same way as u mastered the pad.

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oOBadMeetsEvilOo wrote:
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/6/deckaboyrecords.htm



Click the song name and prepare to nod your head...
If ya'll ain't feeling this I need more specific details on what I did wrong


Beat----Through The Wire-Kanye West



I'd rate you slightly below Kayne West under the catogory of utter shit.

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Powder wrote:
i can't believe none of u have heard that beat before, that songs got a fuckin video and everythin. I loved that song by kanye west, but to be perfectly honest it kinda made me think of u differently.

when the fuck did i say i haven't heard that beat?


and the videos wack, why the fuck would u exploit u gettin ur jaw wired shut in order to sell records? ghey...

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Powder wrote:
It was just weird how u ran the shit so well in text, but couldn't follow through on the mic.


^^ that's how I thought about audio until I tried makin a track myself...believe me...there are worlds between text and spittin it properly...

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Calibre wrote:
Powder wrote:
It was just weird how u ran the shit so well in text, but couldn't follow through on the mic.


^^ that's how I thought about audio until I tried makin a track myself...believe me...there are worlds between text and spittin it properly...


WORD!!!!

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ICONOCLAST wrote:

i dont like these Just Blaze / Kangay West style beats... i dunno why. they annoy me.

http://www.hiphop-elements.com/phpBB/vi ... hp?t=44732


Simpleton, I bet you like beats with just 3 bpms and 4 instuments
unlike Kanye beats that average 5 bpms and 6 instruments/samples

Just Blaze is ok :D

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Calibre wrote:
Powder wrote:
It was just weird how u ran the shit so well in text, but couldn't follow through on the mic.


^^ that's how I thought about audio until I tried makin a track myself...believe me...there are worlds between text and spittin it properly...


Word Cali.. I'm glad you realised before you made an ass of yourself. :afro:

See this is good...

Powder.. the old question... Where's YOUR audio... lol, j/p.

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