Man. This site barely moves. Guess people don't have time for this sort of thing anymore. That being said, I'm gonna give a true evaluation...for the sake of productivity. Don't get pissed though:
Syllables came together in rhyme, but it was overly simplistic. Reads like you put down the first two words that rhymed and came to mind. I, myself, have to force myself not to go with the first rhyming couplet that comes to mind. Thats where the depth comes from. I like the first three lines but it felt like there was a fourth rhyming line missing to complete the two couplets, feel me? 4th dimension/living in cards comparison....I'm assuming thats an appeal to opposites since if you're on a card you're 2 dimensional. If thats where you were going with that, thats dope. Just sayin: Get deep on 'em. This took you 20 mins tops, am I wrong?