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i walk alone with friends behind me
branches rub my cheeks, puncture holes, and skewer my tounge
in the last minute of my life i want to be well fed
and proped upright faceing a mirror
i want to see it happen
i want to see the years and age sink into my center
i want to be exposed
i want to be eaten alive
do cannibals use facebook?
i tell the mirror to bottle my last breath
surround it and reflect it untill it moves
...it will never move
the first lady that needs you to apply her make-up
red lipstick, orange eye shade, pink blush- whatever the hue
...show her her true colors
then bottle her last breath

-Mourningstarr

nice, i'm feelin' your style of writing

not bad liked the facebook line

awesome. liked the feeling of the power of "self-awareness" I got from this.

i like the raw appeal of this one. unafraid (at least in word form) of the one thing most people are terrified of. diggin it...

thanks to all, this poetry sector has good crit and comments.