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 Post subject: Drastic Vs NEM
PostPosted: 05/17/09 12:01:12 PM 
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Alright man, Im in Atlantic city right now. I will post up in like a day or too..

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 Post subject: Re: Drastic Vs NEM
PostPosted: 05/17/09 02:19:25 PM 
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ok.
sorry no links..


ill plant plastic explosives inside your house,
i split brains like moses, spit flames at soldiers,
-your hopeless, you can't cope with this,
flying lotus kick,
you really are drastic,
your plastic an fake,
on every fuckin date ya vs someone, you lose,
"dras vs toez,"
ya think toez dont know his flows make you KO,
turn you out like pladough,
engravable, label you unfavorable,
terminate your state,
turn around at your wake,
squeeze a lake of lead at the family's head,
put em to bed with you,
if dras got an issue you dont getta tissue,
instead the butt of a pistol,
tweakin witha fistfull of dollars,
fuckin flail you, break through chainmail too,
ride in on deadly predators,
my lines like poison feathers
burn your body, piss on the embers,
for some members i adopt violent tempers,

nemesis

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 Post subject: Re: Drastic Vs NEM
PostPosted: 05/19/09 09:51:03 PM 
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Look here Nemesis, your presence is
the equivalent of seven kids
eleven bids on the verse I make
I can see how you think it would hurt to take
Everything from you, its not easy to tell
Believe me you sell more mixtapes than at work a day
You take all this time to write a rap
But than you get beat easily, its like you weren't fightin back
We've battled before, and as I remember I took the victory
I don't care how much you have improved your history
I can't believe you came in and dropped that weak shit
Than get infected with my flow once the desease grips
It will take over your body, make you do stupid shit
Like run up on some nice dude, and let loose a stupid rip
I will let loose and blast, this faggot aint shootin back
The implosion of my punch will hit the roof and crack
I am the disputin champ, I can't loose to this clown
you're wack and I shouldn't battle, but Im abusing this round
There are many ways to murk you, but its hard to pick
So next time you come at me with that retarded shit
I have no regard for kids that believe they're thinkin hard
But one crack to the mouth will leave you breathing through a drinking straw
I think its about time I should be done with this clown
This battle it should be known that I am gunnin this down

Alright if voting links are needed just let me know, there are no battles to vote on..

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 Post subject: Re: Drastic Vs NEM
PostPosted: 05/19/09 10:27:39 PM 
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this is my opinion. in no way am i talking shit about anyone, just judging the battle standing alone....


this was a pretty weak battle. maybe you both got it out your system in round 1...dunno

imma give it to drastik. he dissed nemisis more. more disses.

although, i thought nemisis had more interesting rhymes and subjects.

advice: nemisis i could see you being a good battler, if you could tap in your ability to write visuals. develop that shit and write describing in every little detail.

drastik, i think a lot of times you write shit that doesnt make sense, or connect with the line before, but you put it cause it rhymes. try continuing or working with one idea until you exhaust it, then move onto another.

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 Post subject: Re: Drastic Vs NEM
PostPosted: 05/21/09 02:09:47 PM 
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Wow this battle was weak like Lebrons free throws last night......

Nem- you had potential to blow him away but you toyed with half assed disses and cut your verse reall short, barely got any point across

Dras- you always came half assed and even if your appoinent doesnt come with it you gotta step up and say more shit than clown and down and shit a few times you could have murked him but insted you made your verse look just as weak as his

Overall both verses were terrible step up and do a re battle this aint worth picking a winner

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 Post subject: Re: Drastic Vs NEM
PostPosted: 05/22/09 07:22:01 PM 
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more detail will cause me to have run ons

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 Post subject: Re: Drastic Vs NEM
PostPosted: 05/28/09 04:25:23 PM 
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Nah, I've seen you do it before. Forget that you're battlin. Just write....and tweak it later. Yo shit is dark enough that the disses will come.
(Dog, half the cats on this SITE use run-ons)

West is EXACTLY right. Dude be knowin' what he talkin bout :boys:


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 Post subject: Re: Drastic Vs NEM
PostPosted: 05/29/09 05:48:03 PM 
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Drastic man I hate to say this, but you do not seem to be improving AT ALL. You still rhyme the same basic aabb format, and your creativity actually seems to have regressed. I don't know man... I'm not gonna tell you to give it up, but you really need to step it up a LOTTA notches if you're gonna have any chance to win against, or even hang with any real challenge.

Nemesis... you have your own style with a brand of imagery that you've put a stamp on. I've seen you do better than this but you did enough to win this battle, which honestly you could've posted less and still won because of the lack of creativity Drastic continues to show.


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