hiphop-elements.com

It is currently 09/02/14 07:05:56 AM

All times are UTC - 8 hours [ DST ]




Post new topic Reply to topic  [ 5 posts ] 
Author Message
 Post subject: Test drive death
PostPosted: 02/03/09 10:03:37 AM 
Offline

Joined: 08/25/08 10:44:07 AM
Posts: 540
Location: Lost
We pretend to die,
every time we close our eyes and drift into sleep.
We test drive suicide every night...
What's been pinned as dreams,
is just a joy ride inside deaths design.
I wish I could press rewind,
I miss the times when I wasn't grown yet.
Before the onset of owed debt,
until my own depth lessened
to where i'm almost homeless.
Known this,
when I wrote this,
I was fucking depressed.
A malfunctioning mess at best.
There's a beast hidden in the leaves
of each of our family trees.
We tend to weave the limbs together
to cocoon the shame so the world can't see.
We're all high speed on a highway of dying
while lying in bed.
I'll sleep when I'm dead?
You die when you sleep, even if brief.
Your being making attempts to leap
from inside skin, jump starts
your heart once again, in the AM.


Top
 Profile  
 
 Post subject: Re: Test drive death
PostPosted: 02/04/09 01:38:19 PM 
Offline
User avatar

Joined: 04/17/01 05:00:00 PM
Posts: 7521
Location: the top shelf
i loooved the concept...great way to interpret and convey the act of sleep...it helps that the flow was good also

_________________
Image


Top
 Profile  
 
 Post subject: Re: Test drive death
PostPosted: 02/04/09 03:47:10 PM 
Offline

Joined: 08/25/08 10:44:07 AM
Posts: 540
Location: Lost
Thanks rich.
It just kinda came to me the other night when I couldn't sleep.
Too much on my mind these days.


Top
 Profile  
 
 Post subject: Re: Test drive death
PostPosted: 02/04/09 04:52:07 PM 
Offline
User avatar

Joined: 08/15/01 05:00:00 PM
Posts: 1085
Location: baltimore
You know, you really write alot of good stuff. Its weird seeing this though, because I started a poem about dreams a couple of nights ago. It is completely different, however, just the fact that you were writing about dreams within the same time scheme.... or rhythmic pattern of thoughts amongst the collective..maybe its due to governances by corresponding star alignments.. haha.. thats a little out there though.

".. for every night I die; and when the sun reaches its peak, I open my eyes; I am reborn."

_________________
The price of freedom is eternal vigilance. -Thomas Jefferson


Top
 Profile  
 
 Post subject: Re: Test drive death
PostPosted: 02/04/09 05:45:42 PM 
Offline

Joined: 08/25/08 10:44:07 AM
Posts: 540
Location: Lost
It could just be as simple as "Great minds think alike", yeah?
Could be what you said too... I tend to think way out there like that as well. haha


Top
 Profile  
 
Display posts from previous:  Sort by  
Post new topic Reply to topic  [ 5 posts ] 

All times are UTC - 8 hours [ DST ]


Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 1 guest


You cannot post new topics in this forum
You cannot reply to topics in this forum
You cannot edit your posts in this forum
You cannot delete your posts in this forum
You cannot post attachments in this forum

Search for:
Jump to:  
cron
Powered by phpBB © 2000, 2002, 2005, 2007 phpBB Group