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Your a bitch.... im jus getting str8 to da point be4 we FACE OFF.
and I BREAK OFF your arm at da elbow...
wid my knee den scrape ur chest PLATE OFF.
Ill chop you to 4 pieces den feed you to -8 DOGS-.
dat I ain feed for 2 weeks... cuz dey more hungry when -THEY STARVE-.
if you didn't have BRAIN FARTS-
every 5 seconds, and you could accomplish A THOUGHT. you'd be aware that my ~scriptures~ do more than~ hit ya~ and ~split ya~, but dey encourage mAss genocide like ~Hitler~...,ADOLF.
Hes a ~limped dick,lipstick~ werein cross dressing ~sick bitch~ who wouldnt BREAK LAWs, if he had the cops PAID OFF.....KAY YALL?
You verse me in a STR8 BRAWL...?
You getting dismemberd like RAY CHARLES jugglein CHAIN SAWS.
Den burnt like he tried to add one of those wooden planks wid da FLAMES ON
Dis GAYS WRONG.... and queer, its quite FRIGHTNEN.
and at first I tought it wus ~wierd~ dat dey called u ~tears~ and needed to be INLIGHTEND.
Den I read your ~rhymes an~, now I understand exactly why your CRYING.
And if u plan to beat me without another nigga ghost WRITTEN...
You better break out your check book and get ready to start BRIBING.
So STOP LYING, your so for from a ~poet~ wen ur MAKEIN A PAGE.
Dat I ~know if~ Shake Spare may Hear~ your boasting~
He's gonna SHAKE IN HIS GRAVE.
So ur attempt in MAKING A CHANGE and bein positive while PAVING A WAY.
Is gonna ~end you~ and put u on the ~menue~
Then you'll jus be another artist I've~ baked and~ ATEN TODAY
Fuck ~swim-in pools~, back wen I wus EIGHT IN DA DAY
I use to visit hell just to PLAY IN DA FLAMES.
And in da 3rd grade sat next to SATAN AND MADE.
PAPER PLANES and threw em at Jesus and nailed him STR8 IN DA FACE.
You'll get more dan GRAZED WID A BLADE so if you styll wana battle me your BRIAN IS MISPLACED.
Either that Or you CAN'T BE SOBER.
And ~while~ err one laughs at u and ~smiles~ u'll be da idiot in ~Denile~
like "IT CAN'T BE OVER."

You can SAY WHAT YOU WANNA SAY, SAY IT WHEN YOU WANNA SAY IT
sing hooks and travel back to hell on a daily basis
but you must of been too young, forgetting that I was satan
I remember you making paper planes, when I was pissing on your braces
I'll admit your quite courageous, trying to step to the one you call poetic
heard your songs, their all pathetic,
TRAGIC was better than you,you fucking peasant,
TELL HIM to come battle the word chemist
in turn, I wont leave ya life ended

creativity is something that I invented, so don't forget that
they'll think your whole body was circumsized,the way I pull your flesh back
I admire your desk raps, its humorous when you post drops
prepare that to be your career, after I punch in ya voice box
I'm not sober, and I'll never be in detox
I'm not positive or Shakespeare, but I'll SHAKE SPEARS, after I stab em in your reeboks
it is a dope beat I hear? or am I just hearing your knees knock
from having to face me, face it, you'll never be on top
so don't be scared, next time, be aware
when I'm on the move, I can only rise like cab fare
I know this battles unfair, your not on my level
but you requested this battle, this ought a teach you to meddle
battling me, is like agreeing to get fucked in the ass with a bike peddle
make you sound like JOHNNY 5, PLEASE DON'T DISASSEMBLE !!!
anytime I speak, I make your pride tremble
cause your just a Mr. Hyde, without the Dr. Jekkle



here is the beat I wrote this to :

http://rapidshare.com/files/154698510/Talib_Kweli___Bahamadia_-_Chaos__Instrumental__.mp3.html

any feedback on this battle anyone ?

i liked this battle..BUT, i didnt think feeding was allowed

feedback = votes in this case

vote tearz not only cuz he from jersey but tahat like about breaking your elbow wit his knee was wizzack to me.

Feedin = feeding off the opponents verse



I like the way your vote was so thoroughly explained, he's frm Jersey and I had a wak line, real constructive. Did you read the battle or stop after knee?

lol

so its
Tears - 1
Poc - 0

keep em rollen in

I forgot, hea dose voting links

viewtopic.php?f=7&t=102077&st=0&sk=t&sd=a&start=20

viewtopic.php?f=7&t=102200&p=1120105#p1120105

and future opponents dont underestimate me frm dis battle, i aint text in years im tryna get the catch of it agin... actually, go head and underestimate haha

Apoc this round

Ray Charles line-nice. That whole first half....Adolf, paid off, break laws...all that was pretty cool
"KAY, YALL?" For some reason that was my fave part. Like how you slipped that in there.
I'll say this, though: Some parts were redundant, like:

saying the eight dogs are more hungry when they starve....of course they are.
But it sounded good, so...

Tearz, get mad. Take your time wit it.

stopped after knee.

Tru story, its pointless to say dogs are more hungry when they starve haha I jus needed sumtin to rhyme and I sounded nice wen I tought bout it

So
Poc - 1
Tearz - 1

vote apoc

tears you wrote a response to his verse. that takes no creativity. youre better than that.
apoc had some nice imagery and punchlines
see you in our battle nice work here

so

good looks my du, ima post up now


POC-2
Tearz-1

Rd Apoc.
I've definitely read better verses from Tearz on here. Didn't seem like he was really into it on this drop.
Had some hilarious lines though, specially the knees knocking.
Apoc's style is a little confusing to me at times, the way it reads breaks up the flow, but I think my verses have a similar problem.
Either way, Apoc gets the round. More consistent punches and it was a little more raw.