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microphone master, super rhyme maker/while you're posted on the block as a faker yelling "player hater!"/
the greater the vocabulary/the more you are legendary/what i can do with just a few bars is scary/
primarily, a word architect/gaining massive amounts of respect/because of the way I sway dialect/
coming at your neck with styles ninjas could not fathom/chopped bars illicit my poetical passion/
i'll ration/a portion of this thesis to educate the beginners/With wordplay wisdom i'm a winner/
enter the stage/ready to be entertained and engaged/i am a poet and profit/turning words into slaves/
pinpoint the stamina/it's like freestyling while you jog/focusing and determined to break through the fog/
this is all computer digital/light years ahead of analog/clean out your ears/your braincells are clogged/
the freestyle phenomenon/i create the most essential/hand me a pen/i break and bend pencils/
in principle/my poetry is invincible/steal the show in your hometown/getting down is the smooth criminal/
identical to my style/you won't dare find a word smith/i uplift as soon as i meditate then shoot the gift/
quick-witted/optimistic, gifted and exquisite/my verbs are always friendly when i pay the mike a visit/
my rhymes know no limits/rough with the art of rhyme and reason/it's the season for lines to be indented/
whose more vocal, more able, more poetic than the great?/any attempt to out design Soul is too late/
ahead of the wack rap pack trying to exercise their freedom of speech/100 pounds of torque is released/
at peace is the syllable shaman/standing over mountains in the mist/the dragons know of the specialist/
bring your swords to the battle/make sure you have poisoned darts/my aim is to always rip the mike apart/
at heart/i'm a laid back lion ready and willing at any given time/standing lotus position with a focused mind/
the shining dime/art, creativity, and ability's the bottom line/the sun must shine, i can tell when it's time/
focus on what you're saying/your best material will start displaying/i'm golden with no reason for decaying./

UniverSouL The Essential
2010

i wasnt really feelin the openin lines iunno why i think cuz of the faker yellin playa hater, had a hard time keepin a steady rhythm with it too but that could be ur style, this seemed intellectual pretty witty lines

it's like freestyling while you jog/focusing and determined to break through the fog

that one was good, good imagery i liked it

i also liked the part u say pass the pen u snap n bend pencils, lol pretty sick

i didnt know whut u were tryin to rym the word indented with, kinda forced, but overall this was a pretty nice drop, u got some pimp vocab lol keep it up homey pce

MethodZ,
I appreciate the feedback and comments brother. Rarely are my rhymes critiqued in such
a way here. Your comments will help make me a better rhymer.

You'll need to hear me recite this in order to hear the delivery. I am going to record it.
If I can find a beat to match the recording, I'll share it with you.

Thanks brother, one love,
UniverSouL

ya id love to hear how u flow this if u find a beat that matches up with it let me know homey, pce

Sure thing MethodZ.

Rock, rock on brother,
USL

This was some seriously complex shit my dude, The style you write the lines in is a little confusing. But it's your style so i'm not going to knock it. But, the flow is pretty nice, I might be able to help you find a beat for it too.


~DT~

I see what you're saying DT. To me, I think I made the rhyme easier to follow with
the line breaks. Might be different for someone else reading it though.

i'll think about that more when I post my next rhyme here.

I sent you a message to about finding a beat for the rhyme. I appreciate it brother.

One love,
USL

no problem, do what you do. You don't have to change the way you write the lyrics because of what I said. I did understand it, just took me a little bit.


~DT~