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 Post subject: Back at it, enjoy :D
PostPosted: 07/24/14 12:50:28 PM 

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Location: Minneapolis, MN
Haven't wrote something so fast and so public in a good while. Let me know what y'all think.

Spent the last three years never giving a fuck/
Went way past these fears on a promise of luck/
To be honest it sucks, trying live day to day just/
To hear you say the way us, live just creates lust/
thirst for the fake stuff, we're the real deal homie/
Awake and scarred feeling lonely, waiting for that heal slowly/
Gave me a meal only, on the condition I would savor it/
Don't try to pull no darth vader shit, cuz I'm the devils favorite/
Took key, made it fit, these aren't the emcees you are looking for/
Tired of them changing on me, so I dipped right out the open door/
Wish I would have spoken more, but once again I'm left tongue tied/
Say you want this shit done why, you ain't fucking with this young guy/
Look straight up towards the sky, curse this stupid accidental/
Reason I exist and still can't come to grips with my mental/
Just play an instrumental, and listen to the words unfold/
Revealing inner mind untold, ate some amber shard and rolled/
Feel so brave and bold, on a total separate plane/
I just hope that I can reach you with this vocal message chain/
I'll never mess with fame, rather overdose in private/
First they steal your name, like a gang of vicious pirates/
It would seem these malicious pilots, guide our future blindly/
Thinking I should disappear, swear on my fucking life they'll never find me/

 Post subject: Re: Back at it, enjoy :D
PostPosted: 07/26/14 10:57:32 PM 
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Location: C-Town OH 10
It's cool.. The subject matter began to tail off near the end but nice start and decent vocab. Balance your ideas in a more cohesive fashion. I see potential.


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