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 Post subject: ROOKIE TOURNEY Round of 16: devote vs. LIL FOLS
PostPosted: 04/14/03 09:08:25 AM 
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You have until April 21th to post your verse.

First to six votes takes this round. Once again votes must be explained.

Unlimited bars... good luck gentleman. :)

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 Post subject: Lets do this
PostPosted: 04/15/03 10:03:57 PM 
YO!

i read your first battle and never voted/
kuss it looked to me that you wernt that DEVOT-ED/
I'll murderer you lyrically and light u on fire with a match/
then chop up your body and leave it in the korn patch/
how you gonna hurt me when your on your kness/
screaming LIL-FOLS no please/
those will be the last words you ever say/
its pretty obvious that today is your worst day/
If you think your getting to round 3 you better come hard/
and if u dont i'll leave yah bloody and scard/
Your a whinny little bitch that wont ever be missed/
kuss guess what devote youve just been dissed/
Now listen up closely punk/
your a pile of garbage also know as junk/
dont think to highly of yourself/
because right now i'd be concerned for your health/
how do you expect to get to round 3/
kuss first of all you gotta defeat me/

I'm a magician and right now your probaly wishing and cooling yourself down with water in the kitchen.... i hope yo got something tight boy kuss i just riped you appart like rag doll now lets see how fast the Mad Bomber will fall..............

LIL-FOLS

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PostPosted: 04/21/03 11:40:14 PM 
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Emergency your health and safety are in jeopardy/coming just from me pacing then taking you down behind trees and bushes ready to close in/with just the force of a close pin up your foreskin/cause your ego’s lost wind/oh you want more sin as I clock in for work a hit man from hiphop’s underground thunder sounds to break though any kind of tourney rounds/with the mount of my projectiles to probe crazy text styles/your mind piles to happiness your new goal in life is the third round then you cry when iam hittin this profound with crazy fingers sitting as it seems to start spitting cause your computers over filling/is lil fools really willing to be fitted into a rap game he just cant cope with to much racial slurs run his post reply basis/take in a few rounds leave my storm as it passes/comes in then takes the masses havoc of tourney lavished mcess born as disasters/dumb bastard I come with text to bleed excerpts the less it hurts the more you live so after the battle youll be needing a shovel to dig…………..//…


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PostPosted: 04/22/03 05:27:17 AM 
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neither flowed too well imo. Lil Fols used quite a bit of filler and seemed to rhyme words for the sake of it. Devote had a couple of good lines like the jepoardy, but some of it didnt make sense to me. I'm going to have to go with } Devote { as he used better imagery, and had slightly better punches then Lil Fols.

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PostPosted: 04/22/03 09:43:52 AM 
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I think it's, sadly, quite blatant who got this. Lil Fols, your rhymes were INCREDIBLY BASIC and your punches fell very flat. You really need to elevate with most elements of rhyming. I'm not dissing, just trying to help. There was little in your verse that suggested originality. In fact it was a very poor verse indeed.
Devote had some small pieces of filler but he shone in terms of imagery and battle orientated rhymes. His was a solid, hard hitting verse and he took it easily.

Winner: Devote

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PostPosted: 04/22/03 10:25:21 AM 
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comes in then takes the masses havoc of tourney lavished mcess born as disasters


liked this..


devote came more complex, or at least stepped above lil fols simple style..

vote devote

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PostPosted: 04/22/03 12:42:02 PM 
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LilFols:
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Now listen up closely punk/
your a pile of garbage also know as junk/
Dog, I don't know how long you've been writing, rhyming, or battling, but what you need to do is think "what can I say, that hasn't been said, that can destroy my opponent." That's for free.

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your mind piles to happiness your new goal in life is the third round then you cry when iam hittin this profound with crazy fingers sitting as it seems to start spitting cause your computers over filling/

I didn't understand this @ all. I actually think if you had tried to make your verse more coherent, it would have been pretty decent.

Vote> Devote (because his was more original)

dueces, CARDiAC

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PostPosted: 04/22/03 06:31:49 PM 
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devote

thats it. I have too much to say about this, and none of it is very interesting. So just take the vote.

5-0 devote (so far, onemorevote, someone end this)


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PostPosted: 04/22/03 07:31:40 PM 
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It is finished Vote: Devote
He came harder. I think both can do better than this. We shall see.

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PostPosted: 04/30/03 06:46:36 AM 
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devote advances. Good luck on the next round.

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